Spelling:

"mighty halls of intricate dwarven craftmanship" -> "craftsmanship"
"blocks your descend" -> "descent"
"obviously build by dwarven hands" -> "built"
"its ethereal weaponry glims with some deadly force" -> "gleams"
"its skeletal hands halt a mighty battle axe at guard" -> "hold"
"An aura of unwavering loyality" -> "loyalty"

Grammar/style:
"Eternity not be enough to repent for your sins!" -> "Eternity be not enough to repent for your sins!" OR "Eternity would not be enough to repent for your sins!"
"an ancient rune-covered dwarven plate mail adorned with dwarvish runes" -> "an ancient plate mail adorned with dwarvish runes"
"What hast ye stupid pup done" -> "What hast ye done, ye stupid pup"